Somewhere Among The Stars |
The first stage of grief, my lungs seemed to stop working, I felt the pain below my jaw as if I were to cry. I was choked up, with so much to say in so little time I said a simple nothing at all.
Second stage of grief, there was no way any of this could be happening. It was happening if only the pain in my chest could wake me out of this dream. Third stage of grief, I begged God that he wouldn’t be taken from me. This is when the first tear fell hotly down my cheek as I was unable to hold it back anymore. I wanted him back swearing I would hate God if he didn’t listen to me. I felt a hand land on my shoulder, if only it actually comforted me. Sixth stage of grief, I felt like I was screaming, my blood felt on fire and my jaw clenched hard enough to hurt, trying to distract myself from the hurt I already felt. Author’s note: this piece is actually not a complete thought, I was just thinking about irony and how it really isn’t funny when the opposite of what we would expect. For instance, a silence being the loudest someone can be. We have all been through the loud silence of grief found in lost. I don’t like this piece very much mostly because it’s just sort of sad. I should just stick to the more positive stories.
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Shelby Strong
1/25/2017 07:54:07 am
I really like this piece and I think everyone goes through some sort of grief but not in the same way. It would be great if it was finished. I liked it because I can relate to it.
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Alanna
1/25/2017 10:14:36 am
Thanks Shelby, I'll finish it when I'm in a sad mood again.
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Elizabeth
1/25/2017 12:39:38 pm
I understand these kinds of writing, they are relatable in certain ways. the writings that get deep into emotions that relate to how the audiences feel are the ones that create some sort of click in how they are affected by the writing. I do feel like it could have been a little structured better, but like you said it was incomplete. Good thoughts and how you flowed the emotions through.
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